Post by Sadie on Nov 6, 2009 15:38:41 GMT -5
I had to write a "bad" personal narrative for my writing class. It was seriously AWFUL. I thought you guys would get a kick out of this, so HERE, enjoy my bad personal narrative. X3
(Some things that make it bad? Not having a point, not writing in 1st person, being cheesy and insincere, etc. SO ENJOY IT!)
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The Best Day Ever
When Sadie woke up, the sun was shining through her window. It was the brightest, most beautiful sun that she had ever seen in her entire life. She had no doubt that it was going to be the best day ever as she leaped out of her bed and put on her favorite outfit, which of course made her look totally awesome.
And so she ran down the stairs where her mom was making pancakes. Her mom made the best pancakes, full of chocolate chips and love. As she drizzled the syrup onto the pancakes, her brothers and sisters came in. They all looked alike, with blonde hair and bright eyes, and they were all perfect children, so it was a big, happy family.
They sat together eating the amazing pancakes and then Sadie remembered why today was going to be awesome. Her best friend in the entire world was going to take her to their favorite band, and they had front row seats because they had camped out all night to get the tickets. It had been cold, but of course the best band in the entire world was worth it.
And so Sadie ate really fast, so fast that you couldn’t even see her fork. Then she jumped up and ran outside, getting her bike that was ten-speed and amazing. She biked over to her friend’s house, remembering that it was a beautiful day and feeling so happy as she biked down the street in the bright sunshine. Luckily Danielle’s house wasn’t too far away, so she didn’t even get sweaty.
When she got there, Danielle was waiting on the doorstep, looking beautiful as usual. They jumped up and ran and hugged each other, because their friendship was obviously the best friendship ever formed. And then they biked over to the stadium and waited for the concert to begin, meanwhile purchasing awesome souvenirs that would make all of their friends jealous.
A big noise sounded. The band was finally here! Danielle and Sadie jumped and clapped and screamed louder than anyone else, because they were obviously the biggest fans. The music was so moving that everyone wept. At the end, the lead singer threw out a shirt and Sadie jumped up and she was the one who caught it! She was so lucky!
Afterwards, Sadie and Danielle went to get ice cream at a famous ice cream place. They had Sadie’s favorite – chocolate chip cookie dough. And she got the biggest scoop there was and it was so delicious. She and Danielle sat on the pier in front of the beautiful, sparkling ocean and finished their ice cream, watching the sun set beneath the horizon so beautifully.
Then they biked home as fast as they could because it was getting dark, and who knows what kind of monsters were about when it was dark. They pedaled so fast that they were almost as fast as the cars on the streets. And then they got home and parted, promising that they were going to be friends forever. Happily, Sadie went home.
Her parents didn’t question her about where she was because they knew that Sadie was such a well-behaved kid. As Sadie went into the kitchen, she decided to make some brownies because brownies were the best treats ever. But when she went in, she started laughing really hard. Her parents asked her what she was laughing about, but Sadie only shook her head.
“Silly mom! You left the oven on!”
(Some things that make it bad? Not having a point, not writing in 1st person, being cheesy and insincere, etc. SO ENJOY IT!)
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The Best Day Ever
When Sadie woke up, the sun was shining through her window. It was the brightest, most beautiful sun that she had ever seen in her entire life. She had no doubt that it was going to be the best day ever as she leaped out of her bed and put on her favorite outfit, which of course made her look totally awesome.
And so she ran down the stairs where her mom was making pancakes. Her mom made the best pancakes, full of chocolate chips and love. As she drizzled the syrup onto the pancakes, her brothers and sisters came in. They all looked alike, with blonde hair and bright eyes, and they were all perfect children, so it was a big, happy family.
They sat together eating the amazing pancakes and then Sadie remembered why today was going to be awesome. Her best friend in the entire world was going to take her to their favorite band, and they had front row seats because they had camped out all night to get the tickets. It had been cold, but of course the best band in the entire world was worth it.
And so Sadie ate really fast, so fast that you couldn’t even see her fork. Then she jumped up and ran outside, getting her bike that was ten-speed and amazing. She biked over to her friend’s house, remembering that it was a beautiful day and feeling so happy as she biked down the street in the bright sunshine. Luckily Danielle’s house wasn’t too far away, so she didn’t even get sweaty.
When she got there, Danielle was waiting on the doorstep, looking beautiful as usual. They jumped up and ran and hugged each other, because their friendship was obviously the best friendship ever formed. And then they biked over to the stadium and waited for the concert to begin, meanwhile purchasing awesome souvenirs that would make all of their friends jealous.
A big noise sounded. The band was finally here! Danielle and Sadie jumped and clapped and screamed louder than anyone else, because they were obviously the biggest fans. The music was so moving that everyone wept. At the end, the lead singer threw out a shirt and Sadie jumped up and she was the one who caught it! She was so lucky!
Afterwards, Sadie and Danielle went to get ice cream at a famous ice cream place. They had Sadie’s favorite – chocolate chip cookie dough. And she got the biggest scoop there was and it was so delicious. She and Danielle sat on the pier in front of the beautiful, sparkling ocean and finished their ice cream, watching the sun set beneath the horizon so beautifully.
Then they biked home as fast as they could because it was getting dark, and who knows what kind of monsters were about when it was dark. They pedaled so fast that they were almost as fast as the cars on the streets. And then they got home and parted, promising that they were going to be friends forever. Happily, Sadie went home.
Her parents didn’t question her about where she was because they knew that Sadie was such a well-behaved kid. As Sadie went into the kitchen, she decided to make some brownies because brownies were the best treats ever. But when she went in, she started laughing really hard. Her parents asked her what she was laughing about, but Sadie only shook her head.
“Silly mom! You left the oven on!”
